I believe I can
Introduction
Challenges are unavoidable in our lives. Looking back on the past two years, it is worth the trouble to overcome any challenge.
Main body
What was the challenge and how did you overcome it?
Organize your story by using the SWBST strategy within 4mins
Basic Version
Somebody:
YOU
Wanted: What did you want?
But: What was the main problem in the story?
So: How was the problem resolved?
Then: How did the story end?
Advanced Version
Rewrite and polish your story within 6mins
III. Conclusion
What have you learned from the experience?
How to polish your writing
Appropriate transitional words
To indicate time sequence（表示时间顺序）
first of all, to begin/start with, after that, afterwards, since then，meanwhile，in the end, eventually, ...
To indicate parallel relationship（表示并列关系）
also, as well as, neither ... nor ...，not only ... but also ..., either ... or ...，not ... but ..., ...
To indicate adversative relationship（表示转折关系）
But, yet, however, while, otherwise, on the contrary, though, although, even if/though, ...
To indicate causal relationship（表示因果关系）
thanks to，due to，because of，as a result of，so，therefore，as a result, ...
To indicate progressive relationship（表示递进关系）
what’s more, furthermore, moreover, besides, what’s worse, in addition, ...
To list an example（表示列举事实）
such as，for example / instance, ...
To lead to an opinion（表示观点）
in my opinion, in my view, from my point of view, as far as I am concerned, personally, ...
To lead to a conclusion（表示总结）
in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a word, to sum up, to conclude, all in all,
on the whole, in general, ...
But she wasn’t confident and didn’t know how to start.
→ She, , wasn’t confident and didn’t know how to start.
So she decided to develop a healthy lifestyle and lose weight.
→ , she decided to develop a healthy lifestyle and lose weight.
Then, she found strength and hope in boxing training and lost 50 kilos.
→ , she found strength and hope in boxing training and lost 50 kilos.
Advanced vocabulary and phrases
She wanted to change herself and enjoy her own life.
→ She changing herself and enjoying her own life.
She, however, was not confident and didn’t know how to start.
→ She, however, was and how to start.
So she decided to develop a healthy lifestyle and lose weight.
→ So she develop a healthy lifestyle and lose weight.
Flexible sentence structures
Relative clauses（定语从句）
e.g.
Le Ying was heavy and shy. She even couldn’t find a good job after finishing college.
→Le Ying who was overweight and shy even couldn’t find a good job after finishing college.
The book is interesting.
→The book is interesting.
Object clauses（宾语从句）
e.g.
She, however, was unconfident and had no idea how to start.
→She, however, was unconfident and had no idea how she could start.
Reading helps us understand the meaning of life.
→Reading helps us understand .
Adverbial clauses（状语从句）
e.g.
Le Ying who was overweight and shy even couldn’t find a good job after finishing college.
→Le Ying who was overweight and shy even couldn’t find a good job after she graduated from college.
I like reading books.
→I like reading books .
Emphatic sentences（强调句）
e.g.
Then, she found strength and hope in boxing training and lost 50 kilos.
→Then, it was strength and hope she found in boxing training that helped her lose 50 kilos.
Reading makes a big difference to my life.
→ reading makes a big difference to my life.
本节记叙文写作复习，我主要从三个“关注”角度出发，关注学生语言表达能力的培养，关注写作框架的搭建，关注学生情感态度和价值观的引领。
写作课以电影《热辣滚烫》为导入，以第三人称视角向学生简单介绍了电影故事内容，引导学生根据故事内容概括出SWBST记叙文写作策略，帮助学生了解如何搭建记叙文故事框架。然后让学生试着用SWBST写作策略记叙一件自己曾经面临的挑战。接着，向学生展示如何才能让自己的记叙文变得更加高级：1、恰当的过渡词；2、高级的词汇和短语；3、灵活多变的句型。通过让学生当堂做一些句型转化、短语替换等练习来体会以上三种润色作文的方法。最后，让学生着手修改润泽自己的文章。
但是因为课堂时间有限，最后没有预留充分的时间来当堂展示学生的作文；且学生在写作教学过程中基本上只参与了写作环节，评价行为大部分则由我承担。学生不了解写作的评价标准，纯粹为了写作而写作，这样的学习行为还有待提高效率。
